Post by Sam Bellis on Apr 19, 2009 1:27:10 GMT 1
Post them in here if you've done any. Mine starts at 07.22 and ends at 08.00. It's roughly 1000 words and I don't think it's as good as it could be. Really.
24 – The Final Scene.
07.22 AM
CTU – NY
CHLOE- Gosh, Jack you look terrible. Want me to get Kim to take you home?
JACK- No. Yeah, please.
-CHLOE PICKS UP THE PHONE-
CHLOE- Pearson, can you send Kim Bauer up to my office please?
PEARSON (OFFSCREEN)- Right away ma’am.
JACK- Thanks Chloe. You’ve been a good friend.
CHLOE- It’s ok Jack. I’m gonna miss you.
-CHLOE EMBRACES JACK-
-JACK BREAKS INTO A HORRIBLE COUGHING FIT-
-CHLOE PULLS AWAY LOOKING ALARMED-
CHLOE- Jack? You all right?
-ENTER KIM-
KIM- Daddy?
JACK- Hey sweetie. You ready?
KIM- Yeah, the car’s outside, we’ll go to my place, it’s closer.
-JACK CLUTCHES HIS SIDE AND NODS-
-CHLOE LOOKS ON-
07.27
07.32
TONY ALMEIDA IS SITTING IN A VAN, IN SHACKLES AND PRISON THREADS
GUARD (OVER RADIO)- Yeah, we’re just waiting for clearance to leave now. We’re about 10 minutes away.
RADIO OPERATOR SAYS SOMETHING INAUDIBLE
GUARD (OVER RADIO)- Yeah, this bastard is going to pay for what he’s done.
-TONY STARES BLANKLY AT THE PLAIN WALL OF THE TRUCK, HIS FACE EXPRESSIONLESS-
07.35
Kim’s House
–CUT TO JACK AND KIM, PULLING IN TO HER DRIVE-
KIM- Dad, we’re here. You want a drink?
JACK- Yeah, a glass of water please.
-THE PAIR WALK INTO KIMS APARTMENT WHERE CHASE IS SITTING ON THE SOFA WITH BABY TERI AND HIS DAUGHTER ANGELA. ON THE WALLS ARE PICTURES OF JACK, KIM AND TERI FROM KIMS CHILDHOOD. JACK STARES, A WISTFUL EXPRESSION FILLS HIS FACE-
CHASE (TO KIM)- Hey baby, Teri woke up crying about 20 minutes ago. She’s just got off again.
-KIM PLANTS A KISS ON CHASES CHEEK-
KIM- Thanks, hopefully she’ll stay asleep for a few more hours. Poor baby’s been through a lot in the past 24 hours.
-JACK CONSIDERS THE BABY FOR A SECOND-
JACK- May I hold her, please?
-CHASE LOOKS AT KIM FOR APPROVAL-
KIM- Of course you can, she seems to find you the most comforting person around anyway!
-KIM PICKS UP THE SLEEPING INFANT AND LAYS HER GENTLY IN JACKS WAITING ARMS AND TAKES CHASE INTO THE KITCHEN-
-JACK SITS WITH BABY TERI FOR ABOUT 30 SECONDS AND LOOKS UP AS THE FRONT DOOR OPENS-
-RENEE ENTERS-
RENEE- Chloe told me you weren’t feeling too good. You ok?
JACK- No, I’m fine. Really.
-JACK COUGHS, HACKING AT HIS THROAT, IT WORSENS-
-RENEE TAKES THE BABY-
JACK- No! Please, I’m fine. Let me hold her.
RENEE- Jack…
JACK- Renee, please.
-RENEE PASSES TERI BACK TO HER GRANDFATHER-
-CUT TO KIM AND CHASE IN THE KITCHEN-
CHASE- How’s he doing?
KIM- I don’t know. I know he’s not getting better, I know he won’t ever get better. I just didn’t expect him to deteriorate so quickly. It’s breaking my heart.
-KIM QUIETLY BEGINS TO SOB-
-CHASE TAKES KIM IN HIS ARMS AND SOOTHES HER-
CHASE- Kim, your father is a brave man. He saved thousands of people by making sure that the Prion virus didn’t get out. He’s dying for something. He’s dying for the country he’s devoted his life to.
KIM- I know he is, it just breaks my heart that what I could do wasn’t enough.
-KIM AND CHASE WALK BACK INTO THE LIVING ROOM-
JACK- Teri reminds me so much of how you were 25 years ago. So quiet and peaceful… Blissfully unaware of the surrounding world. Unaware of the constant danger. Beautiful. I’m sorry, maybe she should be put down to bed?
KIM- I think you’re right. I don’t want her being woken up. May I have some time alone with my dad please, Renee, Chase?
-CHASE EXITS WITH BABY TERI IN ONE ARM AND ANGELA HOLDING HIS OTHER HAND, RENEE FOLLOWS-
07.43
07.48
-TONY ALMEIDA IS BEING LEAD THROUGH A CORRIDOR AND UP SOME STEPS. HE IS LEAD INTO WHAT APPEARS TO BE A COURTROOM AND HE TAKES A SEAT.
COURT GUY- Case of United States of America versus Tony Almeida, all rise.
-COURT RISES AND A JUDGE ENTERS AND SITS-
JUDGE- This court is now in session, will the defendant please state his name.
ALMEIDA- Tony Almeida.
JUDGE- And how does the defendant plead to the charge of possessing a biological agent with intent to kill?
ALMEIDA- Not guilty.
-MUCH UPROAR FROM THE GALLERY-
07.57
-CUT TO JACK AND KIM PLAYING CHESS-
JACK- Do you remember playing chess, the night before your mother died?
KIM- Yeah, I do. I gave her a whole load of crap and I never really got a chance to apologise.
-KIM TAKES JACKS BLACK PAWN WITH HER WHITE KNIGHT-
JACK- Your mom knew you loved her. And she loved you with all her heart. And so do I, you’re the most precious thing in my life, please baby don’t forget that.
-JACK MOVES HIS PAWN OUT-
KIM- I love you too daddy.
-KIM HAS JACK IN CHECK, AS SHE DOES SO TERI BEGINS TO CRY-
JACK- You go see to her while I figure out my next move, I’m not going to lose this game yet.
-KIM GOES IN TO SEE TERI AND PICKS HER UP-
KIM- Shhh, don’t cry, mommy’s here.
-KIM ROCKS TERI ON HER HIP AS SHE GOES BACK TO THE LIVING ROOM-
-KIM ENTERS THE LIVING ROOM TO SEE JACK SLUMPED OVER THE TABLE, A SLIGHT SMILE STILL ON HIS FACE.-
KIM- Oh God. Daddy?
-THE REALISATION DAWNS AS JACK DOESN’T RESPOND, SHE LIGHTLY KISSES HER FATHER ON THE FOREHEAD-
KIM (SOFTLY)- Checkmate daddy.
-FADE TO SILENT CLOCK AS THE TEARS FLOW FREELY DOWN KIM’S CHEEKS-
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24 – The Final Scene.
07.22 AM
CTU – NY
CHLOE- Gosh, Jack you look terrible. Want me to get Kim to take you home?
JACK- No. Yeah, please.
-CHLOE PICKS UP THE PHONE-
CHLOE- Pearson, can you send Kim Bauer up to my office please?
PEARSON (OFFSCREEN)- Right away ma’am.
JACK- Thanks Chloe. You’ve been a good friend.
CHLOE- It’s ok Jack. I’m gonna miss you.
-CHLOE EMBRACES JACK-
-JACK BREAKS INTO A HORRIBLE COUGHING FIT-
-CHLOE PULLS AWAY LOOKING ALARMED-
CHLOE- Jack? You all right?
-ENTER KIM-
KIM- Daddy?
JACK- Hey sweetie. You ready?
KIM- Yeah, the car’s outside, we’ll go to my place, it’s closer.
-JACK CLUTCHES HIS SIDE AND NODS-
-CHLOE LOOKS ON-
07.27
07.32
TONY ALMEIDA IS SITTING IN A VAN, IN SHACKLES AND PRISON THREADS
GUARD (OVER RADIO)- Yeah, we’re just waiting for clearance to leave now. We’re about 10 minutes away.
RADIO OPERATOR SAYS SOMETHING INAUDIBLE
GUARD (OVER RADIO)- Yeah, this bastard is going to pay for what he’s done.
-TONY STARES BLANKLY AT THE PLAIN WALL OF THE TRUCK, HIS FACE EXPRESSIONLESS-
07.35
Kim’s House
–CUT TO JACK AND KIM, PULLING IN TO HER DRIVE-
KIM- Dad, we’re here. You want a drink?
JACK- Yeah, a glass of water please.
-THE PAIR WALK INTO KIMS APARTMENT WHERE CHASE IS SITTING ON THE SOFA WITH BABY TERI AND HIS DAUGHTER ANGELA. ON THE WALLS ARE PICTURES OF JACK, KIM AND TERI FROM KIMS CHILDHOOD. JACK STARES, A WISTFUL EXPRESSION FILLS HIS FACE-
CHASE (TO KIM)- Hey baby, Teri woke up crying about 20 minutes ago. She’s just got off again.
-KIM PLANTS A KISS ON CHASES CHEEK-
KIM- Thanks, hopefully she’ll stay asleep for a few more hours. Poor baby’s been through a lot in the past 24 hours.
-JACK CONSIDERS THE BABY FOR A SECOND-
JACK- May I hold her, please?
-CHASE LOOKS AT KIM FOR APPROVAL-
KIM- Of course you can, she seems to find you the most comforting person around anyway!
-KIM PICKS UP THE SLEEPING INFANT AND LAYS HER GENTLY IN JACKS WAITING ARMS AND TAKES CHASE INTO THE KITCHEN-
-JACK SITS WITH BABY TERI FOR ABOUT 30 SECONDS AND LOOKS UP AS THE FRONT DOOR OPENS-
-RENEE ENTERS-
RENEE- Chloe told me you weren’t feeling too good. You ok?
JACK- No, I’m fine. Really.
-JACK COUGHS, HACKING AT HIS THROAT, IT WORSENS-
-RENEE TAKES THE BABY-
JACK- No! Please, I’m fine. Let me hold her.
RENEE- Jack…
JACK- Renee, please.
-RENEE PASSES TERI BACK TO HER GRANDFATHER-
-CUT TO KIM AND CHASE IN THE KITCHEN-
CHASE- How’s he doing?
KIM- I don’t know. I know he’s not getting better, I know he won’t ever get better. I just didn’t expect him to deteriorate so quickly. It’s breaking my heart.
-KIM QUIETLY BEGINS TO SOB-
-CHASE TAKES KIM IN HIS ARMS AND SOOTHES HER-
CHASE- Kim, your father is a brave man. He saved thousands of people by making sure that the Prion virus didn’t get out. He’s dying for something. He’s dying for the country he’s devoted his life to.
KIM- I know he is, it just breaks my heart that what I could do wasn’t enough.
-KIM AND CHASE WALK BACK INTO THE LIVING ROOM-
JACK- Teri reminds me so much of how you were 25 years ago. So quiet and peaceful… Blissfully unaware of the surrounding world. Unaware of the constant danger. Beautiful. I’m sorry, maybe she should be put down to bed?
KIM- I think you’re right. I don’t want her being woken up. May I have some time alone with my dad please, Renee, Chase?
-CHASE EXITS WITH BABY TERI IN ONE ARM AND ANGELA HOLDING HIS OTHER HAND, RENEE FOLLOWS-
07.43
07.48
-TONY ALMEIDA IS BEING LEAD THROUGH A CORRIDOR AND UP SOME STEPS. HE IS LEAD INTO WHAT APPEARS TO BE A COURTROOM AND HE TAKES A SEAT.
COURT GUY- Case of United States of America versus Tony Almeida, all rise.
-COURT RISES AND A JUDGE ENTERS AND SITS-
JUDGE- This court is now in session, will the defendant please state his name.
ALMEIDA- Tony Almeida.
JUDGE- And how does the defendant plead to the charge of possessing a biological agent with intent to kill?
ALMEIDA- Not guilty.
-MUCH UPROAR FROM THE GALLERY-
07.57
-CUT TO JACK AND KIM PLAYING CHESS-
JACK- Do you remember playing chess, the night before your mother died?
KIM- Yeah, I do. I gave her a whole load of crap and I never really got a chance to apologise.
-KIM TAKES JACKS BLACK PAWN WITH HER WHITE KNIGHT-
JACK- Your mom knew you loved her. And she loved you with all her heart. And so do I, you’re the most precious thing in my life, please baby don’t forget that.
-JACK MOVES HIS PAWN OUT-
KIM- I love you too daddy.
-KIM HAS JACK IN CHECK, AS SHE DOES SO TERI BEGINS TO CRY-
JACK- You go see to her while I figure out my next move, I’m not going to lose this game yet.
-KIM GOES IN TO SEE TERI AND PICKS HER UP-
KIM- Shhh, don’t cry, mommy’s here.
-KIM ROCKS TERI ON HER HIP AS SHE GOES BACK TO THE LIVING ROOM-
-KIM ENTERS THE LIVING ROOM TO SEE JACK SLUMPED OVER THE TABLE, A SLIGHT SMILE STILL ON HIS FACE.-
KIM- Oh God. Daddy?
-THE REALISATION DAWNS AS JACK DOESN’T RESPOND, SHE LIGHTLY KISSES HER FATHER ON THE FOREHEAD-
KIM (SOFTLY)- Checkmate daddy.
-FADE TO SILENT CLOCK AS THE TEARS FLOW FREELY DOWN KIM’S CHEEKS-
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